Blog 8

My first essay went very well in my opinion. The story that I wrote flowed very well from my brain onto the screen as I typed. A bit of revision wouldn't hurt if I spent more time on it. I liked the way it turned out for a first draft. If I had to change things, I would make it a bit clearer between segments and clearly describe or "show" the stories rather than tell them. For my next essay, I wrote about my family business, the restaurant. It turned out pretty well and hopefully it will be that way for everyone else who reads it. It may have a few flaws here and there, but I will work hard to edit the piece. I look forward to writing/editing the final first/second piece to see how it turns out.